An Approaching Storm

Friday Fictioneers is a weekly blog link-up based on a photo prompt. The Challenge – write a one hundred word story that has a beginning, middle, and end. (No one will be ostracized for going a few words over the count.) The Key – make every word count. Up to the challenge? Join in



Mommy, where do clouds come from?
—The rain.
Mommy, where do rain come from?
—The clouds.
But Mommy?
—Shhh…he’s coming. To bed; run.

The truck skidded to a halt in the yard. Lightening flashed. He tripped up the steps. Thunder crashed. She opened the door. He backhanded her, but she was braced for it.

“You fucking cunt. A storm’s coming. What-er-you standing by the window fer?” He leaned in, eyes slits, “stupid bitch.” He stood, wavering, bracing himself using her throat, then stumbled to the couch and passed out.

She tip-toed to her bedroom, snuggling in bed with her fake-sleeping child.


101 words. What story comes to mind when you see that picture? Join in

If you or someone you know is in an abusive relationship, The National Domestic Violence Hotline, 1-800-799-SAFE, has resources for help. Not all domestic violence is physical. Emotional, financial, spiritual, and sexual abuses are all a part of the dynamics of domestic violence. Often times, the non-physical abuses are more prevalent.

Speaking out is scary. Talking to your friend is scary. Calling the police is scary. But these are the only ways to get to safety. No one deserves abuse, no matter what the abuser has told you–you do not deserve it, you have not earned it, it is not your fault.

If you are wondering if you are in an abusive relations, consider these questions from The National Domestic Violence Hotline:

  • Does your partner embarrass you with put-downs? Tell you that you’re a bad parent or threaten to take away your children?
  • Does your partner control what you do, who you see or talk to, or where you go? Stop you from seeing your friends or family members?
  • Does your partner push you, slap you, choke you or hit you? Intimidate you with guns, knives or other weapons?
  • Does your partner  control the money in the relationship? Take your money or Social Security check, make you ask for money or refuse to give you money?
  • Does your partner act like the abuse is no big deal, deny the abuse, or tell you it’s your own fault?
  • Does your partner threaten to commit suicide, or threaten to kill you? Destroy your property or threaten to kill your pets?


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22 thoughts on “An Approaching Storm

    • I found silence to be the best method of coping, but it didn’t do me any good. Once out, I found my voice, but now, four years later, I only occasionally use it as a subject for fiction.


  1. Melanie, Well written and realistic piece. I’m happy for you that you’re out of that situation. It was great that you gave all that info for the use of abused persons. Thank you for speaking out. I hit the Like button because I liked this necessary piece. It had nothing to do with the behavior of the abuser. Well done. 🙂 —Susan


    • Thank you Susan.
      He’s not a likable sort, so I assume the likes aren’t for him. 🙂
      I’m glad I can speak out and give a voice to abuse. It’s not easy to talk about, and not everyone can. I hope the information is useful should anyone need it.


    • Thank you Rochelle. I decanted about the harsh language, then went with it to really get his character across. I know these types don’t consider their words.


  2. Well done, Melanie. Chilling and realistic, too. This is a storm of agony and despair. I think it was good to keep the harsh language in (reading your note above). We should feel uncomfortable with this.


    • We should feel uncomfortable. No one should have any out to excuse him. All too often, in reality, the behavior is brushed off or excused. It’s sad.


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